Need feedback on rejected

Help, please! :blush:
Tell me about my new track!

Very long. Poor development. Instead of kick, there should be orchestral drums (tympani, etc.) with cymbals. You need to pump up the track with emotions. A piano without dynamics … there must also be a development from quiet to loud. Wonderful music! Be sure to finish the track. I really liked it. 2 minutes will be enough.

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Thank you for your advice!
Sometimes I have to get a look from the outside)