Fluorescent colours are a bit much
Typography esp. font choices and hierarchy hard not great
Several areas of the text are unreadable
Thank you 
Just remove the image and check with the results if you still like it.
if I change the picture. Do you think they will accept it
No. My point is because of the image you think it’s ready but not. As @charlie4282 suggested, there’re lots of typo issues you need to fix as well as it’s hard to read
Thank you
Looks like you cramped too many elements and looks like chaos. You violate all graphic design rules and principles. There is not easy fix with this one you need to start over and keep in mind typography, hierarchy, readability composition, colors, execution quality…
thanks bro