The introductory part is not very successful. When listening for the first time, it seemed that the piano was not in time with the music. The piano could be made more expressive.
Strings play the same thing.
0:30 - strings sound plastic and flat.
1:05 - unnecessarily quiet and long introduction.
In the pit is not enough atmospheric. I liked the piano in the pit.
In general, the composition has a big lack of low frequencies.
You need to work more in the mix, and listen to more tracks of top authors in these categories. But this is just my opinion. Of course I could be wrong!
Anyway, I wish you good luck!