Ok, I think I know what you guys are driving at here,
You are saying that you all are hearing the guitar part as the main melody?
Because if that’s what you are referring to then yes its the same, here’ s the thing, I didn’t even consider that the main melody, but part of the song that gives the melody it’s form and structure. I liked how the intervals sounded and decided to use it. I wrote my own melody that is played on the piano and glockenspiel and have always considered that the main melody, knowing this now, my past rejections make a little bit more sense, as do your reactions.
I guess this leaves me to some very important conclusions:
1.I was wrong, you where right.
2.For this style of music, people are hearing the muted guitar as the main voice/melody which I never considered. I always thought that the piano plays the melody and the glock plays it one octave up.
3.You are right IKWYN, I don’t have the grasp I though I did.
4.I’m trying to walk that line between out right copying note for note (learning from the masters) and trying to assimilate form, structure, melody, style and substance and it looks like I may have stepped on some toes. For that I humbly apologize. I am here to learn and master this so I can move forward with composing music and I need to do more work, which is why I posted on here to begin with. I also feel like this is a hold over from my jazz background where improvisers learn from the master by taking their licks and learning them in all 12 keys and working them into their solos, which is how I’ve learned how to improvise and play but it may not have a place here and I completely understand. This is also very frustrating because to a greater or lesser extent, all of these corporate tunes sound pretty much the same, which makes writing in this genre even trickier.
Thank you for your feedback and next time I will strive to be more original in my approach, which as you all know is far easier said then done. I just want to be successful you know?