It seems to me that in terms of musical composition it could be good but it would be necessary to work and improve a lot in two fundamental aspects.
On the one hand, the structure of the song begins directly with the guitar theme and all the instrumentation with which the possibilities are already exhausted.
Perhaps you could start off with just the backing guitar and then add elements of percussion until you get to the theme increasingly so that it creates an upward emotion. If you look at most of the tracks here they are worked like this.
On the other hand, the quality of the drum accompaniment sounds would have to be greatly improved, I don’t know if a piano and some strings sound at the end. I don’t appreciate it well. All that should be better defined.
I hope I have helped you, it’s just my humble opinion.