You used 3 fonts that doesn’t work well together. The background image looks low res. The word “Young” is unreadable. Also the overall look and feel doesn’t tell me this is a church / worship flyer. Looks more like a discount / promotion flyer.
hi i think that this is the first time that i see this lol u have too much of a hierarchy here lol i am kidding, what i try to explain is that usually people turn out to have not hierarchy enough , the issue here is the other way around, apart from the main title, which is basically crushing anything else , there is close to no exposure at all for the other information so that u get into “excessive hierarchy” in a way and most of information are almost invisible. I also do not see what is the point of putting “ultimate” that u are dissaociating from the rest of the title that would be supposed to be paired with this part so that this is looks a bit strange in a way. U also have a major mistake. Yours or young, i am not sure what this is, is close to unreadable due to the lack of contrast. PLs let me remind u that contrast is basic design principle and that messing with it is a “lethal mistake” that can lead your item to be rejected in any case. In addition, sorry o say just this but here when i have a look at what u did , the only thing that comes into my mind is that this item is supposed to be a church flyer … for me there is a matter of coherence and style and u should turn the item into a club party work so that this is way easier for u to arrange. There is , as well , a slight misbalance between sideways of the bottom part and the rest, especially the central axis indeed. The website is misplaced if u ask me and the logo should be given more space , which are somewhat the same issue in a way. Besides, u should invest some time to create a decent professional logo or change the “supposed logo” into plain text , because at this stage it does not look good, not to mention that there is a problem with spacing between the text, title and logo, right now. Hard to identify what 20HS is , i guess this is supposed to be the time , if so i recommend that u rather use more standard a version … like 8:00 pm or something like this
Hello @DesignSomething , thanks for the comments. I used this appearance because I thought I would be younger, it is a young event, although it is a church. But I will take that into account and make some changes. thanks
Hi @n2n44 always good to have a sense of humor, I like that !! Man, I’m really trying to adapt to the criteria and techniques that are accepted by Envato, and your evaluations and @DesignSomething helped me a lot. I will make some changes and send it to you to reevaluate, maybe consider changing the style, we will see in the process. I have seen your portfolio a lot to understand more visually what you are saying. Thank you see you soon !!
i think that trying to fix items as u mention is the best way , many guys usually say that they “will do next time” and come up with a different thing and the very same mistakes in the end
Post it step by step and we can help you
lol if u ask me this is look even less as a worship item as before , again … this looks more and more like a party one and I am not sure why u have decided to choose colors, but indeed, it used to be better beforehand if u ask me … young is way easier to read but honestly now the thing is super flat and uninteresting as well , the footer is way better in my opinion, but u should decrease and lower the opacity of the picture under so that this is more readable , not to mention that the concerned picture does not look super good in my view
Add some champagne bottles and loud speakers to worship till morning
hi for me the second one is way better, however, to be honest , i still believe that this is not really matching between the style of the flyer and what this is meant to be for …
Perhaps because you do not know the language of the churches, these types of arts are quite common, some, I even venture to say that they are much bottom, without underestimating anyone’s work. But I appreciate your feedback. I’ll send it for evaluation and we’ll see !!
Thank you very much @n2n44
Does the language of the church also include poor typography and hierarchy? You need to pray for a miracle to get approved.
if anything is so amazing why did u fail to get the item accepted in the first place … i do mean that i am an expert for church things but what i know is that i see a good deal of items meant for churches and they are more strongly connected to the initial theme than your item , now u are not forced into following, this is up to u … in any event, whether u consider what i said or not, somme thing is not for debate but are facts, like that the multiple level hierarchy in the title in this case makes very little sense to say the least, plus u are emphasizing things that are not really essential when u do not do with more important ones , may i recall u that what matters is where, when, what, who. The conitnuous mixture of variations among the same level of info is confusing, u have to identify just this …, the logo very small at the very bottom and in the middle makes no sense at all if u have any notion of how eyes sweep across a document … (what i usually call “z-shape reading process” but as i am not a english native i do not know f this is the official term …
@DesignSomething Sorry, but I still can’t understand what you mean by “bad typography and hierarchy”. Can you be more detailed so that I can understand?
@n2n44 I am confused when you say about “multilevel hierarchy in the title”. In fact, you have helped me a lot so far, but I’m having a hard time understanding what’s wrong with this hierarchy. I understand that you don’t think this is an ideal language for churches, but it is all a matter of taste … but please help me understand what is wrong with the information?
u cannot have different part of the same title in different size, variations, hierarchy levels like this … the title must look like a homogenous title if u wish not as if there is title and subtitle mixed …