With respect this is miles off.
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as with so many others asking for feedback here, using stock backgrounds and elements that can’t be included is a big obstacle
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typography is all over the place esp hierarchy and font choices
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layout and content is not properly aligned, positioned randomly with no consistency in terms of margins etc
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much of the content esp the main title is not cohesive with the rest of the design
Other more experienced authors like @DesignSomething @ki-themes @flyerlicious may be able to add more