I would be more than happy to provide you with some feedback. I am a new creator here, but I’ve been mixing/mastering, creating, and DJing for about 20 years. I play guitar, bass, drums, keys, and sing.
I will break it down into overall composition/arrangement/instruments, mixing/mastering, mood, strengths, weaknesses, and overall impression. Lets start with overall impression.
This is an enjoyable song. Honestly, I am sitting here jamming to it. Some things stick out to me that are very great and some others, not so much. I will go into detail in the other sections so you can make your improvements. I think with some reorganization of the track, trimming some stuff up, you’ll have yourself a really solid track.
The muted guitar noise in the beginning is great. Very well done, but that pad in the background, uprising synth, are not the greatest instrument selection. I see what you were trying to do but it misses the mark. Try a simple transition effect and get rid of that pad noise. If you want to keep the pad, cut out most of the low and and let the high end bleed into the mix. This will remove some of the cloudiness.
The guitar is nice at 25 seconds. Really nice melody. The lead and the backing guitars. I would try to do a better job at mixing these two together. At the break/bridge at 1:00 the track loses a little too much momentum in my opinion. Also, at 1:13 it falls a bit flat. Good news though, it picks up nicely. I would work on your transitions. Also, work on better fills with your drums. They are not bad by any means, but this will help it pop. Think of your track like a story. Unveil a little by little until it reaches completion.
Mixing/master: I will admit I am listening on headphones and not my JBLs but the track seems “cloudy.” I would go back, re “eq” every track and do more frequency cutting than adding frequencies. Think of it in subtractive way to let other frequencies of other instruments shine through.
Mood: I am loving the mood. Very corporate, product showcase feel. You really hit the mark here with that. Be proud of yourself because I think that might be one the hardest parts of making a song.
Strengths: Very captivating mood. Great tone of guitars. Very nice and crunchy. Is a very solid base for a solid track.
Weaknesses: Overall arrangement. The track loses its momentum at that 1 min mark. Try a piano right there. Something nice and rich with some slappy reverb.
I hope that helps buddy. Best to you!
Keep in touch. Let me know when this becomes approved!