I need feedback [HARD REJECTED] landing page


#1

hi, my first project just got hard rejection… please help me, I need your feedback
here is my template : DEMO


#2

With all due respect you are quite a way off.

the basics like typography, margins, alignment and spacing all need a lot of work.

there are a great number of inconsistencies throughout and while there are some nice touches and ideas the execution is not great.

there is not a huge amount which make sit stand out as original and feels like ‘a lot of bits piled together on a page for the sake of it’, rather than any kind of logical hierarchy.


#3

A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away…

ps. What this landing page sells?


#4

Thanks guys, you’ve opened my eyes