From a commercial point of view, the percussions are too strong, everything has to be put on the same line, no instrument must exceed the others. There may be a lack of originality in the arrangements, but at the core, the main structure is quite good.
Try to remix the strings so that they can be more natural and not artificial. Even though this music was ‘’ Hard Rejected ‘’ continues to practice working on his remix.
I hate to tell others what to do, because I am in this case of uncertain rejection too. I will not name a name but I know someone here, who is in the sellers tops who has been rejected several times so…
Let’s be positive! And good luck in your future projects