File rejected - feedback please!

Hi all,

I’m new to Envato and to creating audio free files in general and my first file got rejected (hardly surprising when I think about it!)

The link to it is below, and very happy to have any honest (but constructive!) feedback from people as to why: I’m sure there are lots of things wrong with it I don’t know about, but I’m very willing to learn and would appreciate it if you have the time for comments.

Thanks!

this song won’t play here, try uploading a soundcloud private link

Ah sorry! Here’s the link for everyone: