My first track got reject, need feedback

Hi All,
I am beginner and to be honest made my track using structure and ideas of some top seller track.And after time and rejecting I see that my track really sounds too artificially. I would like to get feedback and some advice for this track how i can rework it to match requirements(music, style, arrangement, mixing, mastering). Or may be just delete it…:). I will be very grateful for the answers!