Why won't this track be accepted?

What up, guys!
I already have 3 rejects for 3 different cinematic tracks, lol, mostly cause it doesnt fit standarts.
Now I’m trying to become a corporate author and this is my first corporate.

I guess it appears to be corporate\happy or something like that.

So to avoid waiting for weeks of checking it by viewers and probably getting a reject I would really apreciate you to give me some advice, like what to change or at least does it fit any genre standarts and commercially sound good?

In short, what do you think, will it be potentially rejected or not?
Thanks for your attention!