I´m on the street, but it seems sound distorted, maybe too much compression?
Edit: At home now, it doesnt sound distorted, was my phone.
Im agree with Slavomir and Kannonh.
i thinks is problem with overall mix, for me its missing some low end and highs too much harassing, maybe try do better mixdown
sounds cool… I love your change in 1:36… maybe I would did that before… and also would did some more clear bridge with some reversed instrument. it’s only an idea. … but it’s definitly cool!
curators… lots of reasons to be rejected. I’m not very familiar with this genre, but it can be mostly aesthetical issues