Hi!
I think it sounds a bit “post-soviet” and “russki rock” lol 
Sound of drums is very dry and the beat is really boring. And personally I don’t like the strings either
This is the first reason.
The second reason is that it really sounds not commercial and I don’t know which project this music will fit.
Try to copy the sound and ideas of top authors, and then try to bring in your tracks your personal ideas. AJ is a market with its strict needs and unfortunatelly your track doesn’t meet them. But don’t be sad, try once again!