Hi @TheStoryShop,
I think that the track itself is really cool , maybe your intro is a bit too long. You have major problems with your mix. Everything sounds too ‘‘open’’ (EQ) , distorted (probably compression) , and there’s a hum in your background , this track is really nice christmas track, but you have to work on your mixing skills if you want for your next track too be on the stock. You can always find some great tutorials on the internet ! Here’s one , this guy is awesome !!
Wish you the best dude !!