Nice composition, but it’s still way way too harsh. It needs less highs and more lows. 
Use an analyzer (like iZotope Tonal Balance) and compare to a few pro tracks in a similar style.
Nice composition, but it’s still way way too harsh. It needs less highs and more lows.
Use an analyzer (like iZotope Tonal Balance) and compare to a few pro tracks in a similar style.