Rejected track - I would appreciate any advice

Hi, I would like to ask for your opinion and advice on the rejected song below. I know I still have a lot to learn, and I ask for the opinion and guidance of more experienced authors. Thank you very much in advance!

I´m in the street with mobile, so i can´t be more accurate.

  • I think the main problem is in the mix.
  • And the track is too long, nothing really happen, the main melody seems as a jam session.
  • The end is too abrupt.

IOH, the arpeggio remembers me to “Every breaking waves” from U2. :slight_smile:

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Thank you very much for your opinion and you’re right about the melody, it was improvisational. I think a better defined main motif is needed.

Bad piano playing and weak composition.

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Thank you for your feedback!