Rejected Indie pop track, help I want to improve

Hi there,

I’ve got a rejection on an indie pop rock track.
This submission does not meet AudioJungle’s commercial production (samples/recording/mixing/mastering) standard, and its commercial composition/arrangement standard, unfortunately.

Does anybody have any tips on improving this track. Not shure what’s wrong, is it the arrangement (are there weak segments in the track) or mixing, style?
I normally do a lot of “underground” dance music so I am not too familiar with the more indie pop style could this be the case? Some input would really help me to improve.
Thanks.

Here’s the track https://soundcloud.com/user-707909987/uplifting-corporate-indie-pop

Regards,

M.

  1. Bad stereo picture. 2) Dry-sounding instruments 3) Blurred motif (it idea) just set different melodies. 4) Ugly layout of instruments in space.
    https://soundcloud.com/user-707909987/uplifting-corporate-indie-pop
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Thanks for your criticism and through this your suggestions to improve. Do you have 1 or any good reference track which I can use as an example to improve my mix.

Thanks

I think that the bass guitar part is badly thought out here, it does not look natural, a living musician would not play like that. And also the track is very long. The second part looks like a completely different song

Will take another look at the bassline (maybe I can consider a real bass player to play the bassline see what he is comping up with) or program it better (I used Modo bass). I made different sections to not make it not so boring or more or less all the same. Maybe you’re right and the sections are to different, I can try to make a section which is not so different. Great thanks for the input it really helps me to improve as a songwriter/producer:slight_smile:.

I think it’s a really great start. Like others have said, the bass is unnatural.
Also I think it’s too long. It took a while for the melody to come in. I would overall cut the length in half.
The mixing of the drums needs a bit of work also. They aren’t very present.

Good work though! keep it up!

Thank you JackWinn, So far I have to change the bass, make it shorter and do a new mix for sure.