Reject track!

Hi every everyone, unaccepted reject, last was 1 month ago! i decide great this topic to analyse track, and rework and resubmit it after , just for experiment! Lets consider this together!

Listen to the track and notice on your opinion what wrong with it!

Whatever is coming into the right ear at around 8-9 second mark hurts my ears! Way too much high end/volume.

Thank you!