Hello, guys! I take my first steps in music production and I really need your professional help regarding my second track rejection:
I would appreciate your comments and tips. Thank you!
Hello!
IMHO!
Monotonous (bass, midlle, lead parts).
Do not quite like harmony.
Percussion(snare) is not seated in the mix.
My advice, banal but, уou need to work more in the mix(equalization, panning, effects processing, etc), and listen to more tracks of top authors in these categories.
Anyway, I wish you good luck!
Thank you so much! 
I’m going to listen and work hard!
Weak arrangement and dated drum sounds. The drums mess everything up, the background is not bad at all.
I take note. Thank you very much!