Here is my 2 cents for what its worth:
It seems you are following the structure of a “DJ Mix” with the extended intro. I would def shorten your intro for the main version (bring the good stuff in sooner ) and maybe include this version as an option (extended mix)
The melody you used near the end is great, I would bring it in sooner, maybe even in the intro.
I’m not the best to comment in this genre, but like @RockLab says, definately change the structure and bring the good stuff earlier. So bring the part from 1:15 somewhere between 0:05 and 0:20. And maybe some real pauze in the middle, or less instruments.
tnx my friend
tnx a lot
how is mix and mastering?