so? where is this great and helpfkngful community?
Too much dissonance/odd chord choices.
thanks
Hey 
Yeah I hear a lot of dissonance in your track, and I think that the arrangement is a little bit poor and not so interesting matching nowdays standarts.
I get it you wanted to make track more interesting by this chords but for commercial music it’s superfluous I think.
Try to listen top tracks here on AJ, especially in your favorite styles. Try to achieve that quality and sound. Your music must meet the profession standarts and have commercial value for video projects. Also I can recommend to learn on YouTube tutorials, courses more and keep going to write music. Write the music you would buy for yourself.
The quality of tracks on AJ is improving day by day so you have to match this and permanently work hard and learn I believe.
I wish you will get it!
Cheers 
thanks for your help