You’ve already posted your videos in this other thread: In your opinion, why do not you agree to my designs?
Don’t post several threads asking for the same here, this will just make the forums cluttered and a moderator might give you a warning for this.
As for your question: The Reveal at the end is too basic, the background looks a bit dated and I don’t really like the cuts as well as the Radial Blur.
I like the Idea. Only need some improvements in the camera and as well the end logo. Try to make the camera more dynamic animation. The end of the logo u can zoom out and appear the logo. This is my opinion good luck for u