You didn´t write anything, but I suppose you need some feedback. I guess there´s a lot of these kind of works already on videohive. So, it can be rejected because of this reason. Anyway, about design, I think it´s a bit basic, too much empty spaces on screen (except the full screen pictures, those are good to me), in my opinion it needs more details, maybe timelines, some more graphic elements that fill those empty spaces, or more ink layers in different z positions to create a sense of visual depth . Because there is just ink revealing and text and some small particles. Just my opinion.
I saw your item appoved. Very well done so. Good luck with sales!!