Hi there! I admire your humility and bravery in asking for suggestions.
There are some fairly good ideas in your composiiton.
Here are some rough pointers to help you improve:
- The acoustic guitar is poorly recorded and mixed, it sounds rather messy and rough and amateur
- The drums are programmed in a way that sounds very fake and lacks variety or `human factor’
- Your themes are too repetitive without development, there are parts which just feel like a loop repeating.
I hope you don’t mind my comments, and please understand they are provided in the spirit of us helping each other out, it’s not intended to discourage you.