Hello,
I think that your animation is interesting but the final transition between the animation (0:10-0:12) and the logo/text could be BETTER 
Otherwise I don’t see anything esle (maybe you could add more color).
I hope that, that will help you 
Hello,
I think that your animation is interesting but the final transition between the animation (0:10-0:12) and the logo/text could be BETTER
Otherwise I don’t see anything esle (maybe you could add more color).
I hope that, that will help you