Hey, very long intro, this is only one problem. Make fast version of track. And I think yo can add a little moving in your track with some not fat bass and very soft kick and some synthetic percussion (like tail of the clap). And I think you should to cut resonances in the high notes because it sound a little bit distorted. A few fixes and I think this track will be adopted! ( and it’s not necessarily to add bass and drums in your track, this is only my preference!
Regards, D-MUSIC Studio!