Not sure why this was rejected except for “This item does not meet the general commercial quality standard required to be accepted on AudioJungle, unfortunately.” While it might not be for everyone, I think it’s valid enough to be accepted.
Just to begin, the intro is cutted.
You need to work more in the mix and the master.
It sounds like an amateur demo from a band.
PS; I was searching in my portfolio something closer to your track, but this is all that i could find.
And mine needs more mastering, it is too far from the real genius in AJ…
Just to compare, to make you and idea.