If you have a time so please im waiting a critics.Whats wrong.
May be non commercial melody? very similar to some old soviet cartoon music but I like it)
Yes I agree with @MikeStown & think this is non-commercial item , but for other use this fantastical !)))) Nice work buddy )))
I like the melody, nothing wrong with it in my opinion.
I could say it’s lack of depth (like it was even needed in kids music?).
Some more production? More background and effects to it? More instruments?
Good job overall!
Just realized you need to work on mix volume level. Sounds too quiet, but be careful not to shutter it to shreds.
In Soviet Russia, melody approves you!