A new version of the track. Tell me what you think about it.

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1

A new version of the track

The old version

2

I like everything except the piano. I would remove all the piano parts completely. Also I think 1:21 is too short.

Is it meant to be Fashion, not Feshon?

3

Hello! I redid the track. What do you say?

Old

4

the tempo is fast. slower.

5

Hello! Thank you