2nd submission rejected: Could you give me your advice?

Hi everyone!

I just got my second submission rejected and I’d really appreciate if you could help me with your expertise!

Maybe some of you have more experience and could share their thoughts with me!

Many thanks in advance!

I think the high brasses sound artificial.
And the track seems to be lack of commercial value in AJ standarts.

Good Luck

hy @VIMR!
What I like about your track is the brass melody and the bass; I’d make hip hop/trip hop lo-fi flavoured track out of it if I were you :slight_smile:
Best wishes!

What would you suggest to make tracks more commercial relevant? Should the track be more simple? Should the mood of the song be more straightforward?

I’m not sure I understand what you’re saying!
Do you mean there’s no melody to listen to? Or is the existing melody to dominant and draw’s too much attention?

That’s cool, thank you :smile: I appreciate it! Maybe I’ll give it a try! And if you want to make a remix, I’m happy to send you the stems!

In any case, thank you all for your reply!

It is rather hard to explain the “Commercial Value”. But when you listen to the succesful tracks here, and the tracks used on TV commercials, videos etc, you begin to absorbe that feeling. I know this sounds a little bit abstract but i don’t know the other way. Listening and analysing is the key in my opinion

Good Luck.

@MagicMood9 I’ll try to keep that in mind! thanks for the feedback!

I think the brasses are a bit too “far” in the background, maybe too much reverb here.
I like the overall ambiance, and I am 100% in phase with @MARiAN, I’d love to hear a chillhop / hiphop version :slight_smile:

As for the commercial value… I don’t know, I just got rejected as well for a track where I am not sure what is wrong… Not easy when we are new to the game :slight_smile:

@VIMR I forgot to say that I love the bass line here in your track!! Which VST / sample set did you use? It sounds really good.

thank you for your feedback, I can definitely understand the reverb issue! haha :smiley: maybe I’ll give it a try and make a hiphop version out of it :slight_smile:

The bass is the upright bass from Trilian https://www.spectrasonics.net/products/trilian.php

And again, thank you very much for your feedback!

I think the problem is not with the style of this song.

I noticed as a technical mistake that the brasses would be great to be rearranged in the mix. I also noticed that maybe would be more catchy for commercials if you would use more simple and commerce melody lines!

Best Regards :stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye:

thanks for your feedback! What exactly do you mean by technical mistake?

I think, our colleague said everything about this :smiley:

“I think the brasses are a bit too “far” in the background, maybe too much reverb here.”

Best Rgards, have a nice evening :smile:

okay, I understand :slight_smile: thank you for the feedback!

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